A Young And Pretty Barmaid
A Young And Pretty BarmaidShe could have been just any JaneWith puffy lips and bedded eyesHer tits and hips beneath her brainHer snatch is moist between her thighsHis hands caress and meet her...
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Rob--serious disjointed, & of course, the tetrameter contributed a sing-song jingle-jangle. A few sharp images surrounded by a lot of cliche' & even some non-sequiturs. "It feels so good...
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and i think there is not enough blue verse being written. rob, you may enjoy reading _the faber book of blue verse_ edited by john whitworth. toni
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Just a query. I mentioned to Rob a few days ago that this posting had been deleted. Please assure me that I didn't imagine it. I have commented on this poem elsewhere, but I would just like to say...
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Maz--Sorry, but you must have imagined it. It was not deleted. I agree with toni that there's room for "blue verse" or erotica. Why should any subject or diction be denied access into the sonnet's...
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mike,no, this is new/s to me. thanks for the link. i also found something yesterday that is really interesting. there are a slew of literary movements right now. in accord with _Rebel Angels: 25 Poets...
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Grassy,I started reading this, saw tetrameter stanzas and shifted it to Not Sonnets.Reading on, I realised it was three linked tetrameter sonnets, so swiftly moved them back, hoping nobody would...
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David,Thank you so much for clearing that up. I'm sure Rob thought I'd been overdoing the sherbet lemons. LOL.Regards,Maz
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we can do without discussion of sherbert lemons here, thank you very much,p
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I get so stressed and busy,Dissolving in a tizzy.Suck some sherbertSays spotty HerbertThere's nothing quite so fizzy.Regards,Maz
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Thanks so much, everyone, for taking a look and commenting.This poem is not supposed to be a porno piece, and it appears that the first stanza is the problem, because it sets the poem up as such.Oh...
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